Lady Pirate

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Taking down this story, sorry

Wow, that's really good. I love your use of syntax, by capitalizing words such as 'We' 'Our' and 'They' you really give the reader a sense of hate. Also, I ...

This is really good, but I don't feel like you are consistent through out the work. I fell like it is being told from an outside point of view more ...

I like this, it's good, but make sure to watch you grammer, but it's a good start. I also feel like you are sort of on the middle mark, you ...

This is really good, I like it alot. Going a little uber-English-nerd on you, I love how your lack of puncuation further increases the tone of risking, almost panic and ...

Very true. :) Wow, I can't believe you are an alumni, and I still have one more year to go. You know I never thought about it before until Graduation. ...

Hi friends, I know I have very absent, I give my most humble sorries, but I had finales and a play to put on (which went very well), but now ...

Hi guys, we're having some major computor problems, so it might be a little longer before I can post the next chapter. Thanks for taking the time to stick with ...

Yeah, no problem, it might be a few days through. We just go our new classes so I'm working on getting adjusted, but it shoudln't be more than a few ...

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Taking it down, sorry

I'm glad you like the last line...that's Cyan for you. :) I'm going to post chapter four...go check it out.

Thanks for pointed it out, Bri! Ems

Nope, not outside the meeting. The reason they changed their names is so that no one knows who they know outside the order, which makes Sabe and Cyan very...different, but ...